My Inner Critic

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My Inner Critic

My inner critic invites you to tag along on a journey through the deepest, darkest realms of bad fiction, as epitomized in the fanfictional beginnings of the now bestselling series 'Fifty Shades of Grey'. In other words, I am doing a through and critical reading of 'Master of the Universe' by Snowqueens Icedragon. Be warned: Kinky fuckery lies ahead (admittedly most of it is being censored, what with genitalia being vaguely alluded to as 'way down there', or simply just 'there'.) Nevertheless, twelve-year-olds, consider yourselves warned.

  • I like this.” He gently tugs at my pubic hair. “Perhaps we’ll keep this.”
    “Oh… please,” I beg.

    Edward: “Yeah, okay, sure. But only because you asked so nicely!”

    The dialogue in this book has reached a brand new low. 

    Tagged: Ew 'Perhaps we'll keep this'? As in her pubic hair is yours to decide what to do with? Women are but possessions Seriously This is supposed to be erotica? I don't need to hear this Ugh Bad writing E. L. James Fifty Shades of Grey Master of the Universe

    Posted on June 29, 2012 with 1 note

  • Say yes,” he whispers fervently.
    I frown, not understanding. “To what?”
    “Yes to our arrangement, to being mine. Please, Bella,” he whispers, emphasizing the last word and my name, pleading.

    The last word is your name, so yeah… 

    Also, Bella has a choice in the matter? That’s not the impression I was left with last night. 

    Previously in ‘Master of the Universe’:

    • “You are mine,” he whispers. “Don’t forget it.” 
    • “Every time you move tomorrow, I want you to be reminded that I’ve been here. Only me. You are mine.” 
    • “You.”

      “Are.”

      “Mine. Come for me baby.”

      He growls.     

    Tagged: Sookie is mine! Women are but possessions Contradictions WTF Bad writing Focus! E. L. James Fifty Shades of Grey Master of the Universe

    Posted on June 29, 2012 with 1 note

  • I want you sore, baby,” he murmurs and he continues his sweet leisurely torment, backwards, forward. “Every time you move tomorrow, I want you to be reminded that I’ve been here. Only me. You are mine.

    I don’t think she’s liable to forget that he was there during the next twenty-four hours, so inflicting lasting pain upon her is rather pointless. 

    Tagged: Ever the charmer I don't think she's likely to forget that he was there What a gentleman Ass 'I want you sore' I hate the term of endearment 'baby' It makes me feel like he's a child molester And it's used to excess in this book I actually prefer 'spidermonkey' 'Sookie is mine!' Women are but possessions Bad writing E. L. James Fifty Shades of Grey Master of the Universe

    Posted on June 26, 2012

  • I want to fuck your mouth Isabella, and I will soon,” his voice is hoarse, raw, his breathing more disjointed.

    Again, she has not yet signed the contract, so she is in no way obligated to eat his shlong whenever he should so desire. 

    Tagged: Women are but possessions WTF WHAT GIVES YOU THE RIGHT? This is just awful Asking her if she would be okay with it would be nice Ass Seriously Bad writing E. L. James Fifty Shades of Grey Master of the Universe

    Posted on June 26, 2012

  • I cannot move my head. I am pinioned beneath him, helpless.
    “You are mine,” he whispers. “Don’t forget it.” His voice is intoxicating.

    I guess I missed the part where Bella went from being a person to being an object, the part where Bella signed the contract, and the part where Edward asked her if she wanted to enter into a monogamous relationship with him. 

    With or without her consent, she is now his property. 

    Tagged: What is wrong with these characters? She should not be focusing on how 'intoxicating' his voice is right now 'Sookie is mine!' True Blood Women are but possessions I guess E. L. James longs for a time before women had rights 'I will give you two camels for your eldest daughter' Bad writing E. L. James Fifty Shades of Grey Master of the Universe Alexander Skarsgård Anna Paquin

    Posted on June 25, 2012

  • Mike, I’m with a customer. Someone you should meet,” I say to try and diffuse the antagonistic look in Cullen’s eyes. I drag Mike over to meet him. “Can I introduce you to Edward Cullen?”
    Mike and Edward eye each other up and the atmosphere is suddenly arctic.

    Nothing beats a little male rivalry over an altogether unlikable female.

    Tagged: The stone age called: they want their cavemen back What is wrong with these characters? Male rivalry: the driving force behind Twilight Women are but possessions Bad writing E. L. James Twilight Fifty Shades of Grey 50 Shades of Grey Master of the Universe

    Posted on June 11, 2012 with 1 note

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